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混在美国名校(43)---出奇能制胜之别无选择 2011-03-28 07:39:25

那一个晚上,小四几乎一夜没睡。起先极度的震惊和其后巨大的喜悦完全带走了他的睡意,好象天快亮时,他才打了几分钟囤。当他的头脑刚刚开始恢复工作的时候,他就立即知道,他必须冒这个险,他根本无法抵挡这样的诱惑!北京,对他来说,就象玉皇大帝的宫庭,是天堂中的天堂!小时候,他的最大梦想,就是长大后能到北京去看一眼,哪怕呆一秒钟都行,因为从此他就能对村里人说,咱是去过北京的人了。高考时,支撑他拼命学习的动力,也是去北京,不管什么学校,只要能去北京就成。他离村赴京时,连村长支书都来送行,村长还对他说,以后你就是北京人了,跟咱农村人不是一个阶级了。等他来到北京,他才知道,比他有权的,比他有钱的,比他有才的,实在是太多了,就他这样的想留北京,根本没有一点可能。即使他考了硕士考博士,再读博士后,想留京也很难,因为听说现在北京高校只收留洋的或者门路极硬的人,等他毕业时,恐怕不拿诺贝尔奖都不行啦。

 

而现在小四看到的,简直就是一个奇迹。只要他帮室友签一下字,他就能留北京,他就能留高校,他就不用看着那些大字不识几个的当官子弟去教重点高中,而他自己只能教普通高中,他也不用再看着省城的小学老师都羡慕万分。还有,他的父母以后在村里说起他来,该是多么自豪,走起路来,一定昂首挺胸。两个姐姐提到他时,该是多么骄傲,她们为他所做出的牺牲,全都得到了回报。他一定要使劲干,拼命干,多挣钱,为二姐办最体面的嫁妆,送侄女进最好的学校。他还要把父母接到北京看一看,让他们开开眼。等姐姐们的孩子长大了,他也要把侄儿侄女们接到北京来上学……

 

现在,小四觉得没有任何问题了,不就是在推荐信上帮人签个名,又不偷又不抢,没伤着谁没害着谁,哪条法律说不准了?推荐信嘛,都是走个过场,谁还会真的个个去对证一番?梁主任确实是写了推荐信的,内容上有点变化,谁会注意到?就算万一被抓到了,梁主任顶多会批评自己几句,给处分都找不到理由呀。他想呀想呀,越想越觉得这个交易实在是太赚了,简直是花两块钱赌百万,不不不,是千万,是亿元大奖,而且中奖概率很高,怎么也有百分之六七十吧。郑卫这小子挺灵的,应该会走的。他现在后悔了,觉得自己太笨了,反应太慢了,这样的好事,应该马上答应,犹豫什么呢?郑卫会变卦吗?应该不会,他急得不行哩。好吧,明天早晨立即敲定,千万别傻了,千万别丢掉这个天上掉下来的极好机会!

 

小四的生活相当规律,早晨六点半起床跑步,七点回来刷牙洗脸,七点二十吃饭,七点四十到教室预习当天的功课。要是一二节没课,他就上自习、做作业、看书。今天是做实验,早去一会晚去一会无所谓,大家赖床,小四也没起来,昨天一夜没睡好,有点累,主要还是想等郑卫。七点多陆续有人起床时,都奇怪小四今天是怎么了。问他,他也不理。郑卫心里有事,也睡不着了,爬起来说:“小四,是不是身体不舒服呀?我陪你去学校吧。”老七正准备出门,看郑卫跟小四套近乎,奇怪地问:“哎,你起这么早干嘛?改美国时间了?最近你怎么神经兮兮的?”郑卫说:“谁神经兮兮的了?这不是你起来了,闹得我睡不着了嘛。”

 

郑卫跟小四出了楼门,马上问:“四哥,怎么样?互相帮忙吧?”小四其实早已下了决心了,可还是不放心地问:“你说的都是真的?”郑卫保证说:“绝对没问题。我们昨晚跟小静她爸说过了,他说他也是农村出来的,特别知道农村孩子不容易,我又说你多才多艺,她爸说他们需要的就是你这样的。”小四听到那一句“农村孩子不容易”,眼睛都湿润了,就冲杨教授这句话,他也豁出去了,下决心说:“好吧,我帮你签。”

 

郑卫一颗吊着的心,一下子放了下来,高兴地一把抓住小四的手说:“太好了!四哥,咱们俩组成那个叫做什么来着,对了,利益共同体。我出国,你留北京,大家高兴。我这就去机房,一会去教室找你。”说完就跑了。

 

郑卫把文件都准备好后,去教室找到小四,然后两人一起到图书馆找了个偏僻的角落坐下。郑卫把梁主任的原信和他改过的信都拿了出来。小四也没看他都改了些什么内容,只是仔细看了看梁主任的签名,然后找出同颜色的笔,在一张纸上先练习了几次,然后再在郑卫打好的信上签名。第一次可能有点紧张,签的不是很象。郑卫立即又拿出好几张同样的信来,说:“四哥,你随便签。不行我再去打印几张。”结果第二张就签的极象。郑卫一看就说:“行了,四哥,谢谢!”小四说:“那你就快去寄了吧。”郑卫高兴死了, 边喊:“回见!”边飞快地跑了,那速度都能赶上飞向美国的飞机了。

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作者:海攀 留言时间:2011-03-28 16:31:55
转贴:与朋友一起讨论的几个问题


海攀 2011-3-29 06:42
smartman 2011-3-29 01:38

紫星轩: 本文原来是贝壳少有的几篇具有可读性的文章。不过,可惜了,已经,。。。

1. 文笔上,本文作者的文笔流畅,且有生活经历(或许是基于本人生活),文字具有可读性 ...

Sorry, I have to write in English 'cos typing pinyin is too slow for my software. If you guys has a better Chinese software to recommend, I’d appreciate it.

1. After we begin to like and enjoy reading a novel, it's natural for us to read forward as quickly as possible and find out the final answer. Especially on blog where author posts daily, we might feel impatient to wait every day (I had this feeling, too). But that does not necessarily mean the author is digressing or off the mark. I guess the best judgment to this concern is: after author finishes everything, ask a new reader to read from beginning to end and ask him/her if he/she feel the author inserting many unnecessary stuffs. My feeling so far is -- the author is beefing up his story in a reasonable manner and I myself is convinced so far that overall the author is doing a good job in furnishing details to make his story trustworthy and vivid.

Quite the contrary, my objection (or, if you call it, my complaint) to the author is: he did not provide enough details on his characters to make them trustworthy. Actually, I hope or I'd like to ask him to provide more details, even if at the cost of making his novel lengthy. Specifically, I would really like to ask the author for more details on Ms. Liu Juan. What background does Liu come from? Why is she a perfect figure in the novel, which is usually unbelievable in our daily life. I mean, I have never met a girl, beautiful and smart and always topping her classmates in best colleges and always self-disciplined. As is well known, beautiful girls are distracted or allured by lads ever since they were young and are seldom focusing on studying. Why is Liu an exception? The author never explained or implied the reason. I am puzzled or not fully convinced. That is why I said, I like Yang XiaoJing, who is depicted very vividly in the novel. The author said he liked both Yang and Liu. But I am not convinced why he likes Liu because the author omitted details on Liu and did not make Liu’s image complete in the novel.

To author: don’t mistake my feedback as a complaint. It is just a tiny spot on the perfect jade in your novel.

2. The powerful of literature/novel is to tell readers the story is likely to happen in our daily life (that is the first definition of “Novel” by the famous Greek Philosopher Aristotle). When someone commits a mistake or a crime, the novel needs to describe the process. Why did someone do something wrong? What drove him to it? The reason could be personal (in that case, we may condemn the figure) or by the society (in that case, we might think the society forces a good woman become a prostitute so that we have sympathy for the figure and demand the society for a change) or others or multiple. In one word, the novel has to tell us explicitly or implicitly why someone did something unusually or wrong or evil. That is the power of novel. I think it worthwhile for the author to spend several chapters to describe why Zheng invented such a trick and how Xiao4 fell into assisting such a wrong-doing. I like reading the details that makes his novel complement.

3. The detailed description of Zheng’s ill-invented trick does not mean the author appraise this figure or his action. Actually, the author called him 混混 . Obviously the author dislike his actions and his behavior.

Before Wang Suo (the Beijing novelist) became famous, we always or usually thought the main character in a novel should be a hero or a decent gentleman or at least a honest person of integrity. Wang Suo wrote in his novels his major character as an average or below average person. Which is fine. We have accepted the fact that the major figures in novels could be anyone, hero or criminal, good or bad or evil. If the author choose his major character as a criminal, it does not mean the author praises or supports him/her. It is just a different angle of life the author to write in his novel. That is why I disagree on “作者反而津津乐道,让这篇小说的价值大打折扣。” The author needs to provide details in his novel. It is NOT 津津乐道。

flicker 彩虹炫 | 编辑 删除 举报 海攀 2011-3-29 07:14
Hello, Smartman:

Your English is so good even reading it I felt tired :) Yes, you are a smart man!

我还是写中文吧,不然累死了还说不清楚。我把你上节的评论复制到这里了,这样大家也知道我在说什么。

细节的选择,每个作者都必须做出取舍。有时候会很痛苦,什么都舍不得删,一番心血呀。可是没办法,你不能让你的作品冗长散漫。当然,也不能走另一个极端,只有线条,没有细节。实际上,把人物写的有血有肉,鲜活可信,最考验作者的功力。

细节的安排也是一个问题。刘娟并不是主角,对她的描述会比杨小静少。另外,她也不能说完美,因为太沉闷,这也是她对郑卫感兴趣的原因之一。她的形象是根据我的几个朋友综合起来的,各取一点,性格更分明一些。

此章写的长一些,也是表明郑卫被逼无奈,出此下策。已经有好几位读者回贴说自己当年为了出国而不得不做的事。我回贴说,没有害别人,就是可以原谅的。世界是复杂的,要求每个人都完美无缺是不现实的。比方说小四,如果是你,你怎么办?如果你说,我就是回家种地也绝不干这种事。OK,祝贺你,你已经是圣人了!可是请告诉我,你对你的姐姐和父母公平吗?

我同意你的观点,最好看完全书再下结论。我实在不能说太多了。只想问一句:美国好混吗?

非常感谢!
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