早春里的小花 （匯報）
-- by 快活老人 （5/4/2014）
俺快走之前，特向大家匯報一下以前拋磚兩句English的不同命運：
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A little white flower
is blooming in the chilly air
like an
angel singing the song of spring .
Who has noticed
a little black bug
is
also running its life
just in the heart of the pure beauty?
這詩壇上高手如林。如有哪位願幫忙把老朽這兩句English的意思變成一首中文小詩（新，舊體隨便），快活老人將不勝感激。
（註：西門冷雪俠很快就給出三首不同體裁中文詩詞：
- See more at:
http://bbs.creaders.net/poem/bbsviewer.php?trd_id=948244&blog_id=178916#sthash.Q8y1GQeg.dpuf
（兩句English的命運1）
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賀蘭山 2014月04月15日18:36:21 於 [詩詞歌賦]
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回 答: 早春里的小花（April
15, 2014）
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感覺先生讀的英語詩歌少。建議別費勁了。從韻律，格式等等多方面都還不夠。是明顯的從漢詩硬譯的。 - -- 賀蘭山
（兩句English的命運2）
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"James
A. Xxxx" ⊕
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To
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Xxxxx ⊕
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Subject
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Re: FW: A question
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Date
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Fri, Apr 25, 2014 01:24 PM
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Xxxxx，
Thank you for sending me your beautiful poem and photograph.
I am not a poet, so my suggestions should be taken as you see fit.
Here would be my edit.
A little white flower
blooming in the chilly air
an angel singing the song of spring
Who has noticed
a little black bug
running its life
in the heart of the pure beauty?
I just took out a few
words. I think it is a beautiful poem.
Sincerely,
Jim
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On 4/25/2014 9:25 AM, Xxxxx wrote to an American colleague who teaches English Writing:
Hi Jim,
Attached
is a photo I took with my feelings in two sentences.
I just wonder if you could find time to help rewrite it as a little poem:-).
Maybe this does not worth anything, then please forget it.
Thanks anyway.
Best wishes,
Xxxxx
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